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JondumBau+KasumiGoto FanComic 'All the Things She by JasmineAlexandra JondumBau+KasumiGoto FanComic 'All the Things She by JasmineAlexandra
I do not own Mass Effect or any of the characters. I am just an insignificant insect that is just a fan. All characters belong to ęBioWare


I am BAAAAAAAAAACK! Back ont he saddle again.... so seems that Kasumi has a hot button... also yes... unnecessary booty shot... well ME was full of it too... Think Miranda was the only one who worked out?

Seems that Mr. Bau is not backing out on what he said....

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mivpus Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013
This is gorgeous!
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quwykxz Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
You know, while originally playing the game, I never thought of a deep connection between Kasumi and Jondum, but when I started to read a few bits of fanfic and see more and more pics of them as a couple, I started thinking "Wow, this really works, they truly respect and like (love?) each other; why didn't I see it before?!?"
Your series has cemented Kasumi and Jondum as a great couple to me; and for that, I thank you!
I hope that you continue sharing both your beautiful art and powerful, well thought-out, and earnestly heart-felt story with us all!
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grimsoncrow Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
Embarrassing to admit. Enjoying the story. not usually fond of fanfiction. *Sniff* -Problematic.
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quwykxz Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
LOLz @ "*Sniff* - Problematic." :D :D :D ! :thumbsup:
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Wisky-08 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012
Love it!!!
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MrHolister Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Very nice progress as usual...
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Turian-Lover Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:love:
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cassiopeia09 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012
Yes yes yes! This is fantastic! Please continue! :eager:
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Miri1987 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012
MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAR =DD
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brightsunthewolf Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
cool,I love this couple so much
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Ngoc12 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
For one thing, I love the parallelism that you used in the last two pages. Have you noticed? The first panels both include an elbow shot of the character and the receiver looking up at a 3/4 angle towards the speaker. The second panels have the speaker state their thoughts that show great profound insight to aspects of Kasumi and her thievery, something that a lot of people would be curious about(why choose to be a thief?). The third and fourth panels are turning points that with a few angled head shots immediately give an air that something is tense-er. The last panel has impact! Just as Kasumi's closed eyes expression has us immediately recognize it as something like frustration or possibly indignation(or a "I cannot believe you're saying this to me!"), Bau's tight-lipped expression definitely portrays a repressed passion, that he is desperately trying to keep his feelings to himself bcause he does not want to ruin what little he has with her! The parallelism definitely has us think that both are very similar to each other after all, more than they may possibly imagine! It's a type of mirror-effect, if you will.

Some things that you may want to work on is establishing Kasumi's speech pattern. In previous pages, you had her call Bau "Bau-san." and even the slip of "Mr. Bau-san." May I suggest that you keep consistent with dialogue?
There are also a few things about Bau that you may want to tweak.
In the first panel, it looks like that the eye on the left side of his face(right side of the page) has not been fully coloured. The result is that it looks like he's squinting one eye or he has an infection there. Initially, the right eye that has the best view of the page immediately gave him vulnerability. A wide eyed expression like a deer caught in the head-lights. However, the other eye looks a tad evil.
Also, Bau in the third panel looks disinterested in what Kasumi is saying. I'll explain why. It is through the tilt of his head downwards and the way the light of his eyes looks up. This is reminiscent of a glare, almost. His mouth is drawn a little strangely as well, with it being a little steep across his face and a little thick so it looks like he's breathing through his mouth. May I suggest that in order to give him a look of contrition like in the other panels, you would have the shine of his eyes looking downwards instead of upwards?

Overall, the colouring job is really quite good. I love the way you've drawn Kasumi's hair and given it shine! Absolutely beautiful!! The shot of Bau in the last panel is so endearing!! and Bau in the fourth panel almost made my heart want to break! There is so much details in your work!! The background gives great contrast to the figures! And the neon white pattern in the bottom left corner of the second panel definitely had me think of a bachelor's posh apartment!! Love your details!!
The dialogue spoken between the characters really pulls at the heartstrings as well. The dialogue in the second panel has really added more depth to Kasumi!! In the game, we learn that she stole because she liked it, she was a kleptomaniac, it was fun, and it was something she was good at. Here we learn that thievery does not define her. It is just an aspect of her, it is not her entire self! But as thief, she cannot change that about herself because that's just the way she is. She has many more sides!! What she said about memories is touching! Like everybody else, she does not want to be forgotten. Unfortunately, as a thief, the fate is inevitable. Yet she wants to remember Keiji because if she doesn't, who will? It will be as though he had never existed, and the thought is indeed frightful!
And it seems that Kaumi does indeed worry about that herself. Commander Shepard is gone, Keiji is gone, she has virtually no one... except the Salarian Spectre who's chased her for years. But as a Salarian, would he even bother to remember the criminal?
The dialogue in fourth panel is obviously Salarian speech patterns that you've captured well. But he's not backing out on what he said!!! If the next page is anything like your preview... one must wonder how they will be able to make up in a few panels and even hop into bed together!!
Bau in the last panel is the most heart-wrenching!! His inner thoughts conjure up a lot of feelings and imagery!! I can just imagine Bau sitting outside the Citadel in space and letting go of dozens of roses, the red floating away into darkness and disappearing.... Or Bau at the Citadel memorial wall with a bouquet of roses in his hand to place there for Kasumi.
"I feel for you, Kasumi... I feel for you beyond my very being and it frightens and thrills me. Forget you? I tried so hard, only to have you haunt my waking dreams." The prose is amazing!!! Awesome!!! Panel four is Bau at his most poignant so far!!!

Keep up with the details and good work!! This comic is one of the best for ME!! Hope to see another update soon!!!
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JasmineAlexandra Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Student General Artist
Also... The reason she is saying Mr. Bau & not adding the Bau-San is that it is used it as a form of endearment but Mr. Bau had insulted her so she drops 'SAN' when she is angry at him. Which is not too often.
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Ngoc12 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, okay
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JasmineAlexandra Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Student General Artist
the eye thing does bug me but the program is not letting me tweaking it anymore... it takes too much RAM for it so I am stuck with the images... I am sorry... but it is the first time I am touching a computer in 4 months... even before then I was gone again... so I am a bit rusty here & there... as for the eyes though, Salarian blink upwards... I took a shot of Mordin blinking & used it as a model for his perceptive shots... & the one where Bau gets shot... so everything here is what I got from it... Though my Manga Studio program was acting up doing the line work process... I am working on the next comic... Just have to finish up some commissions first... but what about YOUR story? I have been waiting for yours... is it up yet? PLEEEEEEEEASE say it is.... I am on pins & needles here.
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Ngoc12 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, the story? Truthfully, I'm sort of struggling with it right now.... I'm scared of how crappy it's going to be...
Could you possibly help me with a few ideas of what to write?
So far, what I have is some context being established that they were playing 'tag' all over the citadel just to change up the routine of their lives. Then the game ends at his apartment and Kasumi was expecting to kiss him into submission. Instead, Bau surprises her by pulling out Spectre grade cuffs and handcuffing her to.... something, I sort of left that part blank. What do you think he could cuff her to? Even more of the surprise is that instead of going along with the role play and reading her rights or something like he always did years ago, he tosses away his gun and anything that Kasumi could take from him to bust herself out of the cuffs. He falls on her and kisses her. In the adrenaline of the game and the chase, they....
But when they're done and Bau is little more focused and level-headed, they.... again but with more 'heart'. Taking it slow and enjoying themselves.
Does that sound... okay?
Could you possibly help?
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JasmineAlexandra Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Student General Artist
tag huh? Hmmmm.... well how about she took his car keys. They have an exciting chase... she then thinks it is safe as she thinks she lost him in the crowd. he seemed to have been left far behind as she looks over to see if he was catching up to her... but he is gone. She looks a little concerned at first but shrugs it off. Perhaps he took a left when he should have taken a right. She then looks at the keys of his car... perhaps a little ride wouldn't hurt. After all he lost track of her...might as well take it for a spin or two.

She leans back & gets comfortable on the leather seats. It is soft & still had that new car smell. She snuggles in. She closes the hood of the car & turns on the engine. Hearing that baby purr, brings smile to her lips. There was such a rush in getting things your not supposed to & she was relishing it.

Until... a three finger hand flash from behind her from the back seat & her hands are cuffed together. There a certain Salarian spectre comes out from the back & maneuvers himself to the passenger seat.

"I was just about to look for you, Mr. Bau-san" She smiles at him. He looked her over with a raised brow,
"I am sure of that Miss Goto... as sure as I am a Krogran." He winked at her with his eye, "Now that you have insisted on going on this ride...let me direct you to somewhere... private."

"Oh?" Kasumi asks, "SO my guess is, that the location is a surprise?"

He smiles at her as an answer. That knowing smile with a bit of wicked twinkle that only Kasumi can bring to his eyes.

They arrive at this rich manner where there were pools of swirling water everywhere....

"Mr. Bau-San?" She gasped, "You are aware that this is the Salarian council's private water garden?"

Jondum shrugged, "She isn't home" He leaned over to her smiling, placing his hand on her thigh, "She is busy on Sur'kesh... Miss Goto... your not frightened are you?" He smirked at her...

Kasumi to the challenge he gave & smiled, "Why Mr. Bau-san, I do believe I am a bad influence on you."

"The worst..." he said as he drew her in for a kiss.

There they make love in the pools & with Kasumi in handcuffs (For a couple of reasons... Mr. Bau likes being in charge & second to reduce the risk of Kasumi sneaking out with a few tokens)

He pulls at her cuffs like a leash & has his very way with her... Her having to trust him as he takes her in his arms.

Or they could go to the top of the Prisidium. Where Garrus & Shepard did for their date... somewhere forbidden & private.


What do you think?
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Ngoc12 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this!!! Your set up is better than my set up! Hell, I don't think that my set up amounted to anything!!! This is so spicy!!! I am definitely inspired!!!
Check out the deviation tomorrow afternoon or so for the story. I wil try to get it up asap before Tuesday!!
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khazukiart Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012
Ermahgerd. Dat ass.
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Ngoc12 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
OMG!!! The next page!!! Please tell me that the next page will come tomorrow or maybe today!!!
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charmbeander05 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012
this rocks!!!!!
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BlooRibbondrop Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
this is getting more interesting everytime! :meow: i love it :typerhappy:
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crow5by5 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I really am hoping this will be continued
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